smoke is rising

Member since 2004 · Posted 28 Aug 2005 · 1 comment

smoke is rising, screams are heard flames are high, risks are taken choking on air, help me, they cry. heros are below, taking their own lives saving the helpless cought up and overwhelmed, we are like the helpless in the flames screaming to get out of our lives to be saved by our heros. when your choking and dying in the flames run the obstacles set before you persever and most of all, love whatever you doing..

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[5] LilMsLadyPoet 28-Aug-05/7:45 PM Reply

spelling check> cought, heros, when YOUR choking, perserver

Work on the puncuation, it would help it to read better.