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The Ship

by Tainted Butterfly

Member since 2005 · Posted 10 Sep 2005 · Edited 10 Sep 2005 · 1 comment

She took to the sea On her maiden voyage A ship full of dreams, hopes and insurmountable courage. Left the safety of the harbor where she was kept so long Time to open up her sails Let the wind make her strong. Take a chance, travel the world Survive despite a storm Not be scared of going home To the place that keeps her warm. The ship reminds me Of the girl i used to be. Someone afraid to take sail In that unpredictable sea. Yet no matter how scared Every ship must leave it's harbor. Sail to the meaning of it's dreams That's what ships were built for.

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[7] Dan garcia-Black 11-Sep-05/11:41 AM Reply
Lose the fourth stanza and it would rock. By the third everyone reading this know it's about you. You pull it off at the end by making it about Everywoman/child. -7- for now.