| Poem: Submit | Random | Best | Worst | Recent | Comments |
|
It's Simple (Haiku) by Enkidu I give and give and
give and give and give but I will
never take you back
Up the ladder:
Golden Sands
Down the ladder:
Fatherâs Day
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.6666665
Posted: September 13, 2005 9:26 PM PDT; Last modified: June 14, 2007 1:33 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.0794687 Overall Rank: 6467 Comments:
Nice little play on words - the give and take of it all...
174 view(s)
|
||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
perhaps try using other words beside "give" 5 times. i am sure there are other things you do, such as forgave, tryusted, loved, etc. might help paint the picture better if you explain how much you gave...