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Without my Glasses

by Niphredil

Member since 2005 · Posted 1 Oct 2005 · 15 comments

dark shadows, and streaks of white intertwined within; the peering streetlight reaches curiously through the window-shade, leaving little fingerprints.

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[10] zodiac 1-Oct-05/6:52 AM Reply
VADA
His face hurts, and where is his glasses? He can't see without his glasses! Put his glasses on!

(Harry and Shelly are rapidly approaching Vada, Shelly takes hold of her and tries to pull her away)

Put on his glasses! He was gonna be an acrobat.

HARRY
He's gone sweetheart. He's gone!

VADA
Get away, get away!!
[7] Dovina 2-Oct-05/12:01 PM Reply
Don't mind Zodiac, he's heat stricken over there in the Islamic sun. His grammar's gone kaput, and he thinks glasses will relieve his pain.

As for your poem, I'm having trouble with how glasses affect streaks of white that you see, and haw you could see it any better with glasses, looking through the windowshade.
[10] zodiac › Dovina 3-Oct-05/4:28 AM Reply
It's the movie My Girl, starring Macaulay Culkin. 10 points if you knew that.
[n/a] Niphredil › zodiac 3-Oct-05/11:35 AM Reply
does clicking on the little hyperlink thingy and reading the title count? ;-)
[n/a] ALChemy › zodiac 3-Oct-05/9:39 PM Reply
Sounded familiar. Any movie that kills off Macaulay Culkin gets a 10 from me.
[n/a] Niphredil 3-Oct-05/2:41 AM Reply
Heh. Where are you from, zodiac, anyway?

Dovina: the poem was written from my viewpoint, inside a dark room; the streetlight is outside and what I can see is the fuzzy light sifting through the window shade.
'streaks of white' - well, they wouldn't be seen as streaks if i had my glasses on :-)
[10] zodiac › Niphredil 3-Oct-05/4:31 AM Reply
I'm the undiscovered corpse of Qusai Hussein, a.k.a. 'The Cultured Hussein', a.k.a. 'Little Torturepants', a.k.a. 'Bunny'.
[10] zodiac › zodiac 3-Oct-05/4:32 AM Reply
I'm also an English major from Cold Mountain, NC, currently living in the Great Arab Armpit.
[7] Dovina › zodiac 3-Oct-05/4:35 AM Reply
He always tells us that. Just grin and go on.
[10] zodiac › Dovina 3-Oct-05/7:38 AM Reply
What a bind you've got me in! How do I prove I actually do live in the mideast without coming off like a hopeless wanna-be introvert? Oh, no, wait. I don't give a fuck. "Put on his glasses! He was gonna be an acrobat" is the best thing posted on this site in weeks. Its astonishing interworking parts ought to be dissected and studied.
[n/a] Niphredil › zodiac 3-Oct-05/11:34 AM Reply
If only I knew what 'being a wanna-be introvert' has to do with anything...
[n/a] ALChemy › zodiac 3-Oct-05/7:44 PM Reply
Just for possible future use (you never know) and I hope you don't take offense but how does a heart of America boy keep himself from having his head sawed off by psychotic Islamic fundaMENTALists with rusty hunting knives in the heart of beelzebub's shit heap.

I could be wrong about the beelzebub's shit heap part. If I am I appologize. I might have been thinking of West Virginia at the time.
[10] zodiac › ALChemy 5-Oct-05/1:44 AM Reply
I speak fluent Arabic jive. It throws off my enemies, giving me time to throw a handful of sand in their eyes and disappear.

Also, I live in the safe part of the Middle East, (the only Middle Eastern country without a major attack against tourists this year! 2100 Safe Days and counting! Woo-hoo,) the Hashemite Kingdom of Jordan. Also, I'm serious about speaking Arabic jive.
[8] Ranger 19-Feb-06/2:25 AM Reply
Very readable indeed, although I couldn't tell from experience if this is at all accurate; I shall take your word for it.