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when i make sculpture

by ay deee

Member since 2005 · Posted 25 Oct 2005 · 20 comments

i think: no, i look then extract obscure slivers and blatant symbols a man choking on a pair of pliers a silver coated stalagtite chopping and casting wiring and grinding clay in the air all the while thoughts do creep in conceptualization this red brick means something different to everyone my vision blurs goals melt and flow roundabout solidification i keep my hands and mind busy

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[7] Dovina 25-Oct-05/5:37 PM Reply
The last verse is a disappointment after that good build-up.
[n/a] ay deee › Dovina 27-Oct-05/7:14 AM Reply
sorry to disappoint, but perhaps i was looking for more of a tie back to the beginning rather than a climax. this seems to be a(problem?) theme in the writing i hae done lately. any suggestions?
[8] zodiac 26-Oct-05/5:53 AM Reply
"Usage Note: It is not surprising that blatant and flagrant are often confused, since the words have overlapping meanings. Both attribute conspicuousness and offensiveness to certain acts. Blatant emphasizes the failure to conceal the act. Flagrant, on the other hand, emphasizes the serious wrongdoing inherent in the offense. Certain contexts may admit either word depending on what is meant: a violation of human rights might be either blatant or flagrant. If it was committed with contempt for public scrutiny, it is blatant. If its barbarity was monstrous, it is flagrant.

Blatant is sometimes used to mean simply “obvious,” as in the blatant danger of such an approach, but this use has not been established and is widely considered an error."
[n/a] ay deee › zodiac 27-Oct-05/7:10 AM Reply
thank you for the clarification, i do think my use of symbols is blatant (guns, genatalia, etc.)in some cases; people often get upset about it, but i suppose the symbol itslef is not blatant, just my use of it... thank you again.
[8] zodiac › ay deee 27-Oct-05/12:36 PM Reply
No, the aboveposted message means you misused the word "blatant" in your poem. Now in your comment, too. Twice. The symbols aren't all bad.
[n/a] ALChemy › ay deee 29-Oct-05/8:03 AM Reply
Blatant tends to be intentional. ie. A blatant lie.
Flagrant tends to be obvious and usually a violation of some rule or law. ie. A flagrant foul.
(Notice an intentional foul is something different and could technically be called a blatant foul if the term were to be adopted.)

You won't likely find this distinction in a dictionary but it's about the easiest rule of thumb to go by. Both reflect you in a negative light. Like saying my symbols are obvious and bad and that's the way I intended them.
[n/a] ALChemy › zodiac 29-Oct-05/8:13 AM Reply
This comment is blatant plagiarism and should be considered a flagrant offense to originality.

Just kidding I steal from dictionary.com all the time and of course you did use these (""). I just thought I'd try to use both words in a sentence correctly. Not sure I did, but I think I did.
[7] <~> 26-Oct-05/10:20 AM Reply
excellent visuals here.
[n/a] ay deee › <~> 27-Oct-05/7:14 AM Reply
thank you, i would hope a poem about sculpture would offer that.
any in particular you enjoyed more than others?
[8] Niphredil 26-Oct-05/11:20 AM Reply
stalactite or stalagmite, not stalagtite. :-)

Good work!
[n/a] ay deee › Niphredil 27-Oct-05/7:15 AM Reply
thank you for the clarification, which one hangs down and which builds up?
[8] zodiac › ay deee 27-Oct-05/12:37 PM Reply
Stalactites hang down.
[7] Dovina › zodiac 28-Oct-05/9:37 AM Reply
Is there some other direction to hang?
[8] INTRANSIT › Dovina 28-Oct-05/3:37 PM Reply
Let us consider the phone: You, "hang up" on someone, yet, the phone still hangs down upon it's hook. Both at exactly the same moment.
[7] Dovina › INTRANSIT 28-Oct-05/5:59 PM Reply
You can hang up, hang in, hang with, or hang out if you want. But a stalactite can only hang. Sorry.
[8] zodiac › Dovina 29-Oct-05/1:07 AM Reply
I was using ay deee's phrase. The most logical answer to "what hangs down?" is "X hangs down."
[7] Dovina › zodiac 29-Oct-05/11:07 AM Reply
X = (-2) ^ 1/2
[n/a] ALChemy › ay deee 29-Oct-05/8:47 AM Reply
Hypothetical scenerio:

A section of cave is carved out and placed into a giant transparent globe with a giant chain attached to one side.
The roof and floor of the cave are flattened and cealed to prevent further formations on either. The walls are left alone.
Some spinning device begins to spin the chain and globe with it's modified cave inside very repidly. Eons pass and stalagmite and stalactite like formations appear on the walls while the ball and chain continue to spin.

Now my question is- How they hangin'?
[n/a] ALChemy › ALChemy 29-Oct-05/9:01 AM Reply
Also if you put the cave in space (-0- gravity) the stalactites don't hang at all.
[8] INTRANSIT 28-Oct-05/3:53 PM Reply
rogue -do- in the fourth.