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When Did You Walk Away?

by TLRufener

Member since 2004 · Posted 6 Nov 2005 · 11 comments

The world has become confusing Everything I knew has changed The sun has hidden behind the clouds And each day it only rains A river of tears flows from my eyes The ocean waves are cold and gray My heart has shattered into a million pieces Wondering ‘when did you walk away?’ I cannot help but ask who is by your side I see you together each and every day She suits you well, better than me At least that is what you say She can keep you as long as she can I have to wonder how soon you will stray After that the roles will be switched She will ask ‘when did you walk away?’ Your life will carry on until you die Always changing opponents in you fray Each and every heart you break Will band together in strength and pray The tables will turn on you soon A girl will be the one to stray You will cry alone with your broken heart Asking, ‘when did you walk away?’

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[7] zodiac 7-Nov-05/5:20 AM Reply
I know you use your poetry to convey your thoughts and experiences and wish to make an accurate account of your life and times and everything, but did you know that in 61 poems you've asked an astonishing 83 questions? Do you plan on ever answering anything?
[8] Dovina 7-Nov-05/2:05 PM Reply
The question always has to be asked, when exactly did a separatiion of friends really happen? It's not when one of them walks away, but sometime before, maybe a long time before the other even suspected it. "When did you walk away?" is a good question.
[8] Dovina 15-Nov-05/8:12 PM Reply
I wish you had not deleted some fifty comments.
[n/a] TLRufener › Dovina 15-Nov-05/8:22 PM Reply
When the comments no longer pertain to the piece, and all the commenters are doing is fighting with each other, I feel that they can be deleted.
[8] Dovina › TLRufener 15-Nov-05/8:30 PM Reply
It's like a housefull of kids tearing the house up with our ruckus sometimes. I guess we should fight on our turfs.
[7] zodiac › TLRufener 16-Nov-05/5:32 AM Reply
I guess we've at least gotten to the bottom of "Do you plan on ever answering anything?".
[n/a] TLRufener › zodiac 16-Nov-05/6:00 AM Reply
Not everything has an answer, and sometimes the answers to questions we ask now won't surface until later in life.
[n/a] ALChemy › TLRufener 16-Nov-05/6:20 AM Reply
Yeah exactly like what precisely does make your shower curtain suck in when you turn on the shower? This topic has been debated by people with real scientific degrees. Apparently nobody has gotten the funding yet to do the appropriate tests.
[7] zodiac › TLRufener 16-Nov-05/7:06 AM Reply
Yes, but most of your questions have answers, and most of those answers are either yes or no. To name a few others,

Q: Where have equality slipped off to?
A: It was never here. You've been taken by an equality impersonator with a bad accent.

Q: Did you ever hear me cry?
A: No. And I don't want to. Stop that right now, mister.

Q: Did the Angel knock upon your door?
A: If it did, I was in the shower.

Q: Did they carry you away?
A: Who? Weren't you talking about one angel? Um, no.

Q: When you looked into their eyes did they option you to stay?
A: No. Nice grammar though.

Q: What did I do to make them take you from me?
A: You have to believe in them to make them come, usually accompanied by saying 'Angel, Angel, Angel' in a mirror at exactly midnight. Buying an Angel tv-show box-set does it too.

Q: When did you walk away?
A: Easy. Right before I wasn't there any more. Time to move on.

What I'm trying to say is that people read poems be spoonfed answers, or to check their answers against someone else's. If I ever did think of a question I thought had no answer, I'd avoid putting it in a poem, for fear some reader who knew the answer would think I was kind of dumb. You can't say I'm not talking about your poems.
[n/a] TLRufener › zodiac 16-Nov-05/11:24 AM Reply
I write my poems to help myself come to terms with feelings that I have. Many of my poems have stories behind them and out of context, they don't make sense. I just look for opinions on the writing and possible meanings to find a different way to look at them.
[7] zodiac › TLRufener 17-Nov-05/5:32 AM Reply
Oh. Okay. Well it was just a suggestion.