Free verse № 134711
Count All the Stars
I sit quietly,
Here in the dark.
Peering out the window,
I count all the stars.
Iâll wish on every one,
Until you come back.
You left me here,
Alone and sad.
You left the world behind,
And went on to a better place.
Iâll sit here and wait,
For your return.
You said youâd come back,
And take me in your arms.
Now I sit in the window sill,
And count all the stars.
Until Iâm no longer lonely,
And you hold me in your arms.
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GOOGLE CLICHE COUNT
"I sit quietly" = 20,700
"Sit in the dark" = 123,000
"Peering out the window" = 19,300
"Count all the stars" = 623
"Wish on every one" = 190
+ "Wish on every star" = 769
"Until you come back" = 126,000
"You left me here" = 33,400
+ "You left me alone" = 27,700
+ "You left me sad" = 1,830
"You left the world behind" = 249
"Went on to a better place" = 786
"Sit here and wait" = 47,400
"For your return" = 566,000
+ "Sit and wait for your return" = 125
"You said you'd come back" = 590
"Take me in your arms" = 120,000
"I sit in/on the windowsill" = 119
"Count all the stars" = 623
"I'm no longer lonely" = 580
"You hold me in your arms" = 20,100
"I was your Abilene dream" = 0
+ "I was your dream" = 357
"Your rainy Chelsea thoughts" = 0
+ "Your rainy thoughts" = 1
"The moisture on your fingers" = 49
"midnight moon Prince" = 53
"I was your IPOD lyrics" = 0
+ "I was your lyrics" = 29
"You cantered through suits" = 0
"Breathless even then" = 21
"Before we ever touched" = 390
"You were my serpent" = 1
"My scent of apples" = 0
"Eve slept against my rib cage" = 0
"Knowing the end was near" = 492
"We met in Coventry" = 7
"Both becoming flesh" = 1
"Trains spat diesel" = 0
"Was it a ghost" = 1,160
"Taxi to a Hotel bar" = 4
"Lips betrayed minds" = 0
"Nerves brined my palms" = 0
"Whenever you breathed" = 39
"We left for Texas engaged" = 0
+ "We left for Texas" = 195
"Broth of your mothers mouth" = 0
"Stirred the cauldron of my tongue" = 0
"Promises were made" = 107,000
"Ring became a rock" = 0
"Rock became sand" = 10
"Sand became time" = 0
"Time impaled her heart" = 0
"Left me deaf and blind" = 68
"Waiting for a train" = 167,000
"That brings new lovers" = 1
+ "Brings new lovers" = 2
"Her wailing ghost" = 3
Naturally, GOOGLE CLICHE COUNT is only a very rough indicator of clicheness and, Dovina's snarky assessment notwithstanding, not meant by me as any real measure. (Though in its defense, notice that it managed to pick out Caducus's biggest cliches, "Promises were made" and "Waiting for a train". Incidentally, this doesn't mean that Caducus's poems are great, only that they're comparatively less cliche.) In deference to Dovina's sensibilities, I've at least decided that posting a TOTAL CLICHE COUNT at the end is unfair and unnecessary. So bite it, Dovina.
If you're speaking generally - it's surprisingly hard to make people believe they're cliche. Usually you tell them and they're just like "I've got to live my own life" or "I am alone amidst a crowd" or "FREEEEEEEEEDOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMM!"
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