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Free verse № 13520

Trust Exercise

Member since 2002 · Posted 6 Sep 2002 · 1 comment

None of you knew where I really was The day I fell back And no-one caught me. I was falling through clouds Of your reassuring words, watching How they dissipate up close like clouds. Falling past your many fingers Noting how they pointed Straight down. And I finished up flat Upon my back, but rather that Than in your hands.

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[7] <~> 6-Sep-02/1:38 PM Reply
too many cloud-like clouds in 2, other than that, not a cloud in sight.