DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Privacy Compromised

Member since 2004 · Posted 20 Dec 2005 · 11 comments

Crosslegged in tangled sheets, cabage-patch hair, gown hardly there, networked, conversational, rank. Sequestered and secure, but for peepers in verse, prying Toms, unwrapping hate from tough love, unmasking faith behind dogma dispelledâ slipped hints of me.

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 6.17 weighted 5.31 rank 3547 views 293 View voting details →

6 votes so far. Yours would make 7.6 votes so far

11 comments

[7] PoeticXTC 20-Dec-05/8:45 PM Reply

Lmao, Im tripping over your last line, krayz!!!
"Unmasking faith behind dogma dispelled-slipped hint's of me."- Curious as to what you meant by "... slipped hints of me."

[n/a] Dovina › PoeticXTC 21-Dec-05/1:31 PM Reply

They look at my dispelling of dogma, and read into it a faith that they say I have, but deny.

The "slipped hints of me" escape the rein of objectivity with which I try to restrain them.

[8] crazyknight 21-Dec-05/6:57 AM Reply

simple meaning,
deep words

[n/a] Dovina › crazyknight 21-Dec-05/1:32 PM Reply

If the meaning is simple, shouldn't the words be too?

[10] zodiac 21-Dec-05/8:46 AM Reply

cabbage.

[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 21-Dec-05/1:27 PM Reply

Since the poem is not perfect (cabbage is misspelled) on what basis did you vote 10?

[10] zodiac › Dovina 22-Dec-05/7:51 AM Reply

It's one of your better efforts. I liked it at the time. I long ago stopped requiring perfection for 10s.

[n/a] Prince of Void 24-Dec-05/12:01 PM Reply

my admiration to this poems slipped hints of mine
i want to depict the gothic princess as the modern poet..

[n/a] Dovina › Prince of Void 24-Dec-05/12:03 PM Reply

I am quite gothic-looking in left profile, and quite the modern poet when viewed from above and free from this tangle of sheets.

[6] lmp 3-Jan-06/3:22 PM Reply

huh. so you write from your bed, posting to a (this?)website as soon as you awake after a wild night partying at a gala event and rubbing elbows with those who pick apart your ideas and offer critique of your work. and you try to maintain a facade, a mask to hide behind lest they hurt the real you.
that's what i get, anyway. so, who is Tom? <grin>

[n/a] Dovina › lmp 3-Jan-06/3:27 PM Reply

Close to right. Tom is the rare one who gets it right.