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Free verse № 137076

Spinning, reeling

Member since 2002 · Posted 17 Jan 2006 · 13 comments

Let's make of it an abstraction; the bombing, death, destruction-- just a reasonable reaction. (Exercise the rhetorical; dismiss dissent as political) [oilOILoilOIL OILoilOILoil] Let's calculate the absence of action: what then could have been the distraction? [Economy falling public schools failing joblessness soaring deficits swelling Bill of Rights gutted resources glutted . . . nothing to see here, move it along:] We've freed the unfree! God bless my country, tis of thee, we'll bring Big Oil to Babylon-- thus our benediction! (Just sustain the fiction!) (Pare it to words no longer than two syllables, present it as a flag-wrapped, plain-talkin' parable, drape atrocity in ambiguity to make it all palatable and keep them all malleable; keep the concept altogether simple.) We'll need a new slogan, keep them focused on the tagline. Don't worry about the headlines- Fox fixed the spin; we're all in it to win! What lies? Nigerian follies? Our intelligence was solid! Tony told us so-- how were we to know? Don't blame our Popular Wartime Prezident(TM)! He only lied by accident! We must admit, your doubt leaves us perplexed-- it's not as if he lied about, say, sex.

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[9] MacFrantic 17-Jan-06/10:51 PM Reply
Hah, this is pretty damn good, and I don't care at all about what you have to say. *9*
[9] ALChemy 19-Jan-06/12:57 PM Reply
More of a punchline than a gut-punch ending. Pretty decent political rant though.
Here's what I mean by gut-punch:
"We got around to the subject of war again and I said that, contrary to his attitude, I did not think that the common people are very thankful for leaders who bring them war and destruction.
"Why, of course, the people don't want war," Goering shrugged. "Why would some poor slob on a farm want to risk his life in a war when the best that he can get out of it is to come back to his farm in one piece. Naturally, the common people don't want war; neither in Russia nor in England nor in America, nor for that matter in Germany. That is understood. But, after all, it is the leaders of the country who determine the policy and it is always a simple matter to drag the people along, whether it is a democracy or a fascist dictatorship or a Parliament or a Communist dictatorship."

"There is one difference," I pointed out. "In a democracy the people have some say in the matter through their elected representatives, and in the United States only Congress can declare wars."

"Oh, that is all well and good, but, voice or no voice, the people can always be brought to the bidding of the leaders. That is easy. All you have to do is tell them they are being attacked and denounce the pacifists for lack of patriotism and exposing the country to danger. It works the same way in any country."
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-- From Gustave Gilbert's Nuremberg Diary interviewing Nazi war criminal Herman Goering from his cell during the Nuremberg trials.
[6] Dovina 19-Jan-06/1:43 PM Reply
Rant on. This war is getting tedious and almost ridiculous even for we who supported it in the beginning.
[9] ALChemy › Dovina 19-Jan-06/1:49 PM Reply
I hear Osama wants a truce now.
[8] zodiac 19-Jan-06/2:21 PM Reply
The people who needed to know this already think you're nuts, on account of your hair and hanging around all day on a pastel-blue poetry site.
[n/a] ecargo › zodiac 19-Jan-06/2:32 PM Reply
Hee--that obvious, huh? I'd cut the hair, but, dammit, it's my truest claim to beauty. ;)
[8] zodiac 19-Jan-06/2:22 PM Reply
The people who care don't need more convincing.
[n/a] ecargo › zodiac 19-Jan-06/2:30 PM Reply
Well, as my first commenter put it: " don't care at all about what you have to say . . .". Therein lies the problem.

It was much more immediate when I first posted it back in '03 or whatever. Now we're all just tired. (I know I am.) But I did rewrite the ending and all, and I did tell myself that for every new one I wrote I could repost an old one so . . . there you go.
[9] Ranger 8-Mar-06/9:45 AM Reply
Heh...it took me while to get this one to open but the effort was worth it.
This has possibly the greatest closing stanza of any political poem ever!
[n/a] ecargo › Ranger 8-Mar-06/9:49 AM Reply
hee--I dunno about that. The Wilfred Owen approach is probably more effective in the long run than the Gilbert & Sullivan approach. More memorable, anyway. ;)
[9] Ranger › ecargo 8-Mar-06/9:58 AM Reply
Hah! Personally I quite liked the ecargo approach, but I'll take your word for it!
[10] Jill Stockinger 15-Jan-07/8:32 PM Reply
It's hard to make decent poetry from heart felt anger over war and politics- not a bad effort-
[n/a] Stephen Robins › Jill Stockinger 16-Jan-07/2:18 AM Reply
Are you Mrs Rockmage? do you have a beard too?