poemranker ::Giving in to a boring suggestion by Joe-joe

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Free verse № 137933

Giving in to a boring suggestion

Member since 2003 · Posted 31 Jan 2006 · Edited 31 Jan 2006 · 5 comments

A highly enthused awl is presently making its way to China just outside my 10 X 10 holding pen where paper clips, loose change, and an empty soup container quiver like a martyr with badly timed second thoughts. Pens and pencils give into the fray While a wayward phone and staple remover stubbornly bore off temptation and I, less inclined to resist, il o h ae f y rmln rtes Yed t te ft o m tebig bohr.

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[9] Ranger 31-Jan-06/8:12 AM Reply
Very readable...'a martyr with badly timed second thoughts' made me laugh out loud, for that this is worth a 9...very creative indeed!
[6] LilMsLadyPoet 31-Jan-06/8:23 AM Reply
cute...
'a martyr'...excellent line!
[8] Dovina 31-Jan-06/12:03 PM Reply
lol. It took me awhile to get the "awl" but it works. "a martyr" should be "martyrs."
[8] ecargo 1-Feb-06/6:55 AM Reply
Ha--cute. Want to take on my upstairs neighbors who walk on hard wood floors in high heels?
[n/a] Joe-joe › ecargo 1-Feb-06/10:14 AM Reply
I would if I could but you can see that I have:
"il o h ae f y rmln rtes
Yed t te ft o m tebig bohr." translated = yield(ed) to the fate of my trembling brothers...the guys in in office didn't catch the bouncing characters so I'm not so sure my little lettering play was detected here.