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a waste of time

by hendrimike

Member since 2004 · Posted 4 Feb 2006 · Edited 25 Feb 2006 · 7 comments

the eight year binge it is filled with regrets i went to get educated all i earned was self pulsated passing out in my living room on my sofa in my bed drunk in a bathtub in my kitchen alone or with friends on rooftops with a city view margueritas, beers, and guitars somebody's house we hardly knew a thirty pack brought home from the bar going to shows and to clubs far away playing pool after hours in bars on the train in a car on the run it was fun and it never would have ended if the money didn't run out but it always does and it certainly did that is the story of a kid

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7 comments

[6] amanda_dcosta 4-Feb-06/10:40 AM Reply
This sounded more like lyrics to me. And anyway, how old are you now.... that you're already contemplating on your life. a waste of time is an apt topic for you theme. I personally feel you should have given it more thought on the presentation. Not enough drunken language in it. Only description of where. Set the scene a bit cause the entire theme is a 'binge'.
[n/a] Ranger 6-Feb-06/9:57 AM Reply
Should be longer, either you're a delinquent or you have far too much money for your own good! 8 years? That's a hell of a course!
[5] wilco 13-Feb-06/12:47 PM Reply
Doesn't really say much as a whole that couldn't have been said in one verse. Mybe that's the point...hey, it's a mainstream pop song!
[6] drnick › wilco 13-Feb-06/8:23 PM Reply
hahaha
[6] drnick 13-Feb-06/8:23 PM Reply
I agree with what everyone said: you didn't really make a profound statement here. Yet, I still enjoyed this, there are some good lines:

i went to get educated
what i got was self pulsated

on rooftops with a city view
margueritas, beers, and guitars

I'm not sure how you could improve this without completely reworking it.
[n/a] Ranger › drnick 14-Feb-06/9:17 AM Reply
I went to get a Masters
In fact I just got plastered
[3] Blue Magpie 25-Feb-06/3:32 AM Reply
More of what's already been written, plus my personnal beef against the laziness. If you want an education I would start with punctuation, its very usefuly and makes a reader less likely to feel insulted.