poemranker ::Take Me Away When You're Gone by Twisted Wizard

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Free verse № 1397

Take Me Away When You're Gone

Member since 2002 · Posted 10 May 2002 · Edited 10 May 2002 · 8 comments

Her eyes bloom like a flower in the depths of spring. A flower of times long forgotten. Times we shared now lay at rest. As does she. Her beauty no longer radiates peace in my heart. Never again shall I see the flowing sea of her endless golden locks. Be it true that my sadness is permanent. It is now I seek to find her soul, Lost in a dreary grey world. Entwined in my endless search, My flesh and her soul shall meet. One last time we'll meet before the threshold of winter comes upon us. One last time before the sun sets on the horizon. One last time before I wake. On the morn I'm awakened by a subtle touch. Startled, I jump, as if in a rush. Her familiar eyes set a gaze upon me. As she leans in closer. An explosion of emotion pulses through my veins, Taking me away to far away planes. One look back at our precious home, we say good-bye, My search is over and together we die.

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8 comments

[1] anonymous 10-May-02/7:08 PM Reply
Nate...this is good!!! *muah*
[2] deleted user 13-May-02/11:42 AM Reply
Read "Annabelle Lee" by Edgar Allen Poe
[8] DolphnLvr82 9-Jun-02/2:39 PM Reply
just thought i would read some of yours and hit ya back with a comment.. thanks again by the way.. he was being a real jerk
[7] forestchild7 9-Jul-02/3:12 PM Reply
sad but pretty good... more meaningful and emotional so to speak... *smile*
[10] kissmeufool58 10-Jul-02/9:13 PM Reply
Hey I think you are a good writer! Forget what the ignorant individuals tell you. You have real potential! I enjoyed reading your work and I hope to hear from you :) if you have the chance comment some of my works
[n/a] Twisted Wizard 13-Jul-02/11:16 PM Reply
thanx, it is much appreciated that someone thinks good of my works.
[7] horus8 16-Jul-02/12:27 AM Reply
Hey dude what's up, you remind me of well me about a decade ago you'll grow wiser and faster. Push harder. Keep the line between honesty and wit semipermeable.
Do me a favor, as an experiment, (controled) go to www.gangbox.com and listen to the mp3 called "the salesman". I'd like to hear your opinion.
Nice poem, by the way. Try it in Korean. that would shut'em all up..
[n/a] Twisted Wizard 16-Jul-02/3:19 PM Reply
heh, i'll do that :)