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Free verse № 140449

the comet

by pollywolly

Member since 2006 · Posted 9 Mar 2006 · 3 comments

whispering almost glistening visable to the naked eye tail ablaze across the sky the comet flies and flies ever high high and higher this burning sphere draws never nearer fear her! need we fear her?

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[7] Ranger 9-Mar-06/11:56 AM Reply
Quite cool, but you could probably turn this into a concrete poem. Which would be definitely cool.
I liked the ending.
[6] BenRice 9-Mar-06/12:52 PM Reply
I liked the first stanza and not the second. The bit of repetition in the first worked for me as did the rhyming of eye and sky. The second verse seems a bit lazy to me compared to the imagery of the first.
[5] Dovina 9-Mar-06/1:37 PM Reply
Does it really fly? is it a burning sphere? and it draws nearer or farer, I do believe.