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Kristi's Quiescence

by matt door

Member since 2005 · Posted 28 Mar 2006 · 6 comments

She empties me, so carefully, with her saddest smile come autumn. She folds me gently with regret, and sets me softly in her sentiment. She lays me just aside, (such a warm repose from winter), for when the birds come back once more.

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6 comments

[6] Dovina 28-Mar-06/7:29 PM Reply
Poems for the last 300 years or more have expressed similar sentiments, but they are new for each new lover. Carry on, and try to make it as original as is possible with such a cloud of witnesses.
[7] ecargo 29-Mar-06/7:15 AM Reply
Not bad, but it seems too familiar, done.
[4] Garrett S Sexton 29-Mar-06/11:12 AM Reply
A poem to last?
[8] Ranger 30-Mar-06/12:45 PM Reply
'Her saddest smile...' got me going, I feel there's more waiting to be said from there. However, I also think it would spoil the swift beauty of this one. I really like the brevity of it, although I'm not convinced by the first two lines. Still a very pleasant read.
[8] raven_the_poet 4-Apr-06/5:28 PM Reply
very beautiful
<3
[7] nypoet22 14-Sep-06/6:33 PM Reply
seems a bit distant. i like the form and flow, but i don't get any depth of feel for the object of the poem. it might help to expound upon some of her physical features.