A Lover's Lament

by woodstock20000

Member since 2005 · Posted 29 Mar 2006 · 1 comment

If only I could've been left alone, to dance joyously in my own ignorance. If only to be that fortunate! But no, the fire on your lips has burned the cellophane off my eyes - My Innocence has died by your kiss, and I can only watch as it's scattered embers fly into the night...

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[7] matt door 29-Mar-06/6:41 PM Reply

I like the simplicity and regret, but the fluency and word choice could be revised.