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Foray

Member since 2002 · Posted 17 May 2006 · 9 comments

There is not so much left on this earth there is long before the moon turns cold come one last foray into the forest the path is marked by bluebells. Go and traipse the grass with open sandals and see your brown hair an earthy tone we must forge forward my little lady now that it is quicker than to return. I can see a clearing in the far distance and though you probably can’t see it yet the bluebells will lead you like a mentor the forest is not to dwell in past then.

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[9] Dovina 17-May-06/10:46 AM Reply
"Your brown hair an earthy tone" says a lot.
[9] Caducus 19-May-06/5:31 AM Reply
You do personal poems well. Should there not be their?

I always admire your meter and how you keep the narrative behind the poetry.

Line 5 is my favourite as I love the exposure of nature combined with a Fathers caring eye.
[9] ALChemy 20-May-06/3:37 AM Reply
How far can a man walk into a forest?
[9] Dovina › ALChemy 20-May-06/9:04 AM Reply
A mile less than a woman can.
[9] ALChemy › Dovina 20-May-06/11:52 PM Reply
Walking around aimlessly in circles doesn't count.
[9] Dovina › ALChemy 21-May-06/6:50 AM Reply
But writing math poems about waliking in circes does, as evidenced by making you at least to start trying counting. We shall overcome!
[9] ALChemy › Dovina 21-May-06/8:56 AM Reply
Spelling and grammar class is right across the hall. Hope to see you there.
[9] Dovina › ALChemy 21-May-06/12:04 PM Reply
Wow, I was late, and almost out the door, when an urge overtook me, not fully formed, and grossly malformed in hindsight. Sorry, no time for grammar class. Must grope grossly godward – Sunday, ya' know.
[9] deleted user 20-May-06/2:01 PM Reply
"The bluebells will lead you like a mentor" is a great simile--as is the poem. nice work.