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Money Back

Member since 2005 · Posted 22 Jun 2006 · 4 comments

wikedddd smiles and fifty dollars and no apologies you came snd shoved your fist inside with no apologies your vomit yur face your nose and throat no apologies stupid face will always show there's no apologeze.

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[7] amanda_dcosta 22-Jun-06/10:49 PM Reply

Hmmmmm. I like the last two lines that sum up the first six lines . Other than that I ain't relating much to it although I get the scene. Sorry to disappoint.

[8] Ranger 25-Jun-06/11:45 AM Reply

Great repeating lines, they make this catchy and cool. A bit more punctuation wouldn't go amiss though.

How did the year go? The ranker's missed your presence recently, hope things are going well!

[n/a] drnick › Ranger 26-Jun-06/10:31 AM Reply

Glad to see you're still around, i thought the group that i was familiar with had all left. The year went well, im sure i could have done better but then i wouldnt have had as good of a time. Hopefully I'll be able to put some consistent time here now, though. What have you been up to?

[8] Ranger › drnick 28-Jun-06/2:14 PM Reply

Yeah, I think quite a lot of the old guard have moved on, but a few of us are still about. I've finished for the year, and am home over the summer - killing myself working and not having time to write despite promising myself I'd set some aside. Quite honestly I've had the most boring couple of months imaginable...maybe I should have gone to Michigan instead of Cardiff, by the sound of things. A bit more of a trek to America though.
I have got a couple of poems waiting to be submitted; they need a bit of an edit and some proper time before I can bring myself to inflict them on you all though.