Pale Blue

Member since 2003 · Posted 14 Aug 2006 · 2 comments

What is it like to be Immersed in simplicity, The sky above And the ground, well, Quite unfound? Is it cherry, Or is it lonesome, If not very, very Unlike bathing In pale, blue, Scathing waters? Well I hope To be an ordinary Sort of ship And to be equipped With sails to sail into A pale blue Nothingness like you

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[8] creepshow 14-Aug-06/8:14 AM Reply

I like the last few lines, "...sail into a pale blue Nothingness like you." Very piercing.

[8] Ranger 19-Sep-06/7:59 AM Reply

Oh, I must have missed this when it was posted. Nice, stanzas 2 and 3 especially. Could do with working on the stresses a bit.