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Free verse № 145866

Wet dreams

Member since 2002 · Posted 10 Sep 2006 · 3 comments

I dream of seas, a blue-smoke glow surrounds me as I sink below the churning tides, and I am found or foundering or drowned. Awash in multicolored shades, I dive, pale ghost, beneath the waves, descend with the spray of sun to depths that swallow sea-washed light, ballet realms of lissome beings rich with song and ocean sway. I watch as whale calves undulate, their fat black rubber bodies glide along the unseen curves and ways of currents, until, brought up short by mother bulk and wary eye, they submit to nudge and slide of anxious love. And there I hide, a sea-sprung wraith lost to sun but finding faith, a glimmer in a great black eye, rising through the depths of night to burst into pellucid sky.

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[9] nypoet22 10-Sep-06/10:08 PM Reply
hah, wet dreams as in water, fetishy. pale ghost seems in the wrong place in its line. funny how the first and last stanzas are like couplets while the rest is rife with internal rhyme.
[9] Ranger 11-Sep-06/9:38 AM Reply
I found 'mother bulk' incredibly difficult to reconcile with the title...could just be me, I guess. Also, 'spray of sun' was difficult - although it's a lovely phrase - because of the earlier links with night (again, could just be me, I'm tired so bear with me ;-) ). The description is super and I do like the rhymes :-)
[n/a] <~> 29-Sep-06/1:37 PM Reply
gorgeous language, e.

'mother bulk' sat well with me. it was the perfect image, for me, to describe the scene.