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Flood Land, East Kentucky

by zodiac

Member since 2004 · Posted 11 Sep 2006 · Edited 11 Sep 2006 · 7 comments

Beneath the house, old bottles that the river brung, white horse's skull, some Yankee coins, a rusty bike. When Noah cut his hand on it I lay with him, my darling boy, in his room with the junk he'd found: the glass was medicine, the coins were for his eyes, all this from in the house, but it was not of us.

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[10] Dan garcia-Black 11-Sep-06/9:36 AM Reply
"old bottles that the river brung" and "all this from in the house, but it was not of us," sucked me under the house with the rest of the junk. You really are a poet, Damn You!
[10] ecargo 11-Sep-06/9:41 AM Reply
Damn, you really are good. The dialect comes off as unforced and authentic (to my Yankee ear, it must be said--I guess the real test is how a Kentuckian would take it). Great details; restrained and, for that, quite moving pathos; all your usual magic. Even the meter works--alexandrines, for the most part, I guess? So much packed into such a short poem. Really well done.
[9] Ranger 11-Sep-06/9:49 AM Reply
This demands several reads, awesome lines and a compelling story. I suck at accents and dialects, so I'll have to assume you've got it right, but that's not a difficult assumption to justify.
[9] amanda_dcosta 13-Sep-06/3:09 AM Reply
Hey, hey zodiac. Good to see you back. PR's been missing you.
[8] nypoet22 9-Oct-06/10:37 PM Reply
nice use of hexameter. almost because of the old greek form, i'd look for this to be one of a series. i like the assertion of dialect straight from the first line. i can picture the scene.
[n/a] Dovina 16-Dec-08/5:15 PM Reply
Rising in a dust cloud, are you?
http://antwrp.gsfc.nasa.gov/apod/ap081214.html
[9] Sasha 17-Apr-10/10:29 PM Reply
You should totally come back!!