"A senryu is a three line Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku. It is unrhymed and the subject is based on human nature. It is usually satirical or ironic."
'Weather' works fine as a verb in the last line; I read it that way the first time round. You might want to think about making the title a little more revealing - perhaps twisting round the Oscar Wilde quote 'The only thing worse than being talked about is not being talked about' (assuming I remembered the quote correctly). Of course, you run the risk of having a title longer than the poem that way.
Appropriate title, that's for sure. Clever in its way--especially the roundabout ending (everyone mentions the weather and now I must weather your mention [of the weather].
neat, i hadn't even thought of that! i actually meant now i must weather your [being mentioned by someone else]. i love it when people discover abiguities i hadn't considered.
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