Love Trail

Member since 2004 · Posted 12 Oct 2006 · Edited 12 Oct 2006 · 5 comments

Don't love with your anger Don't love with your pain Don't love with your fingers Don't love with your brain Love with your heart And love with your glances Love with your warmth And love with your chances Never change Should love estrange Never break Should love mistake Love will quarrel Love will burn Love will hurt Love will turn Look for lust Find a mire Look for love Find a fire In our eyes Love'll see In our souls Love'll be One word One breath One life One death Love

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[7] Ranger 12-Oct-06/10:49 AM Reply

"Love'll we"?

[n/a] D. $ Fontera › Ranger 12-Oct-06/1:12 PM Reply

Love will we/ we will love

[7] Ranger › D. $ Fontera 12-Oct-06/2:06 PM Reply

You've gone through the entire piece without inversions, why start near the end? You could use 'Love'll see' instead, a reference back to the first line of that stanza. Or there are a million other options which don't require twisting the word order.

[n/a] D. $ Fontera › Ranger 12-Oct-06/2:30 PM Reply

Good point, just a couple changes and...there, perfect.

[7] nypoet22 12-Oct-06/6:02 PM Reply

awwwww. this belongs on a hallmark card.