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Free verse № 1485

what part

by silvertongueddevil

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 May 2002 · 5 comments

what part of love is desire? is it this part, where i am watching you in the same way that i might listen to a quiet music and you walking across the room like the loudest siren fill me, empty me or is there no part for desire in love and i am failing when faced by you in your summer shirt

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[6] anonymous 14-May-02/9:17 AM Reply
something about the blandness of the last line loses me. Maybe you should just drop it... leaving the last line: "and i am failing/when faced by you"
[6] anonymous 19-May-02/11:09 AM Reply
aaahhhh

it works

I hear ya!!!!
[6] anonymous 19-May-02/11:10 AM Reply
aaahhhh

it works

I hear ya!!!!
[6] anonymous 19-May-02/11:11 AM Reply
aaahhhh

it works

I hear ya!!!!
[6] alexander 22-Aug-02/1:09 AM Reply
Truth in concrete letters