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Member since 2002 · Posted 13 Sep 2002 · 4 comments

LORD I FEEL IM TO DEEP IN THIS GAME EVERYDAY IT FEELS LIKE IM GOING INSANE I TRY TO DO RIGHT BUT IM SURROUNDED BY WRONG I CAN'T GET SLEEP AT NIGHT CAUSE IM WATCHING MY HOME YOU SAID ASK AND YOU SHALL RECEIVE WELL LORD I'VE CRIED,BEGGED,AND PLED I DON'T WANT TO LIVE THIS LIFE NO MORE BUT IT SEEMS LIKE YOU CLOSED AND THE DEVIL OPEN THE DOOR YOU SAID I HAD A ANGEL WALKING WITH ME 24HRS A DAY WHAT'S WRONG WITH MY ANGEL DO HE NOT KNOW WHERE I STAY

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[6] poetandknowit 13-Sep-02/10:37 AM Reply

Hey, who gave this a 0. I kind of like it, minus the caps, but maybe he is hard of hearing from the mortar fire.

[8] deleted user 13-Sep-02/1:23 PM Reply

i agree, there's no way this is a 0. it has a very jazz age-harlem renaissance feel to it. like a streak from Ellison's Invisible Man.

[4] pete 13-Sep-02/2:44 PM Reply

.. yeah , nice and bluesy ... pity 'bout the suspect religiosity ..... 4

[0] Tintagiles 19-Oct-02/7:18 PM Reply

Department of Guardian Angels
Cloud 6
Heaven

Dear LIL ZAY:

We're afraid that your angel met with an accident; he was run over by a cement truck while sneaking away from you to go urinate. Unfortunately, we're rather understaffed right now, so it will be some time before we can get around to helping you. In fact, we may not be able to. We did ask for volunteers, but though one showed up, your obnoxious use of capitals turned him off -- he's rather delicate ears and didn't want to be yelled at all day. You could always ask the Devil -- he's rather a decent fellow if you ask the right way.

Regretfully,

Saint Gabriel Archangel
Spokesperson for God
Department of Guardian Angels
Cloud 6
Heaven.