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My Mamma's Hands

Member since 2002 · Posted 13 Sep 2002 · 5 comments

Kitchen knife cut adorned Garlic redolent Fingernails pragmatic Dishing out that disgusting Clump of hair From the bathtub drain With finesse unparalleled My sister's hair plaited Shoelaces tied Neat for school Cheese sandwich toasted Orange juice squeezed and chilled Ready to serve Stillness grips Chilly, very cold Pragmatic fingernails blue I painted them red.

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[4] pete 13-Sep-02/11:41 PM Reply

pragmatic fingernails an interesting phrase but should only be used once ,or if intentionally reversed closer together ... paints a picture of death .... is that right ? .. 4

[n/a] amateurR › pete 13-Sep-02/11:45 PM Reply

thanx for the comments and constructive advice..i appreciate it and i see what ur saying on reading it again...
yes..it is right..death was the picture i was trying to paint..my mom passed away 4 years ago. thanx once again.

[8] Bachus 14-Sep-02/12:50 AM Reply

see pete! that's why hippies talk alot of shit , but in reality they know shite? it's about the dullery of taking care of incompitent others (that you love more than hate !?) and skillfully wishing for hot sexy lusty longterm love and adventure. not death .twit . you say 4 ..i say double. you want trouble. cuz i got a tipping plate of it.fucker. 8/10.

[5] god'swife 19-Sep-02/4:30 PM Reply

Not bad. Not good but not bad. There's no emotion. I going to a Dodger game and then I'm camping all weekend. Talk with you on Monday.

[8] Quarton 14-Jan-03/9:16 AM Reply

Very descriptive and excellent imagery. Loved the second stanza.
This rates a high mark.