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Free verse № 151064

Whispers the Pariah

by Enkidu

Member since 2004 · Posted 17 Mar 2007 · 2 comments

Dispose of this insipid wretch Don't listen to him prattle Would you prefer his serpent gab He'd most prefer a battle Of tongue Of wit Of liquid charm His clamor ripe with pins Deception paints his pallet Whilst crude light Bursts from within Just listen to his fallow fancy Be so rapt and coy Lie in sheets of poesy Asphyxiated by his ploy Mountain gives to suckling shore As gloaming prays for sun So whispers the pariah Of your fickle flesh undone

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[7] Dovina 18-Mar-07/8:11 PM Reply
Take the l out of suckling
[8] Skamper 23-Mar-07/9:41 PM Reply
Nice/twisted/descriptive and fast!
I like the suckling as it feels like the shore is a parasite on the mountains it washes upon.
Not sure about using 'from' in the line...bursts from within...Reads just as well without, humble opinion only.