poemranker ::Talk by Skamper

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Free verse № 151397

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Member since 2007 · Posted 10 Apr 2007 · 2 comments

his eyes feel the cold beneath her shirt and he works - orally stripping tangled strings with voiced inflections directed intentions he removes her things she resplendent - eyes defending but none-the-less warming responding - to the timing of his undressing she leaves her things hanging - on his sweet sounds he announces - I touch you she laughs Yes – I felt you... eyes smiling - his hands brush the strings his fingers tap upon her heart – there? No – she plays... Lower

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[5] pete 15-Jun-07/6:45 AM Reply
well; i think that's nice .... somewhat lacking in something .... getting skampered out catcha later
[n/a] Skamper › pete 19-Oct-07/5:37 AM Reply
it's lacking playfullness...thanks for reading and taking time to comment... :)