Take-Off

Member since 2004 · Posted 11 Jun 2007 · 4 comments

I, took a breath And stretched wide my eyes To the furthest ocean In the deepest sky The cresting waves Curled on for days Begging sailor, lay down with me And in the distance mountains soared Alabaster peaks rising high They joined with the sun Letting fingers run On any surface seen Through panes of glass I could clearly see Mount Olympus and Poseidonâs sea The sun kissed my cheek as I wondered aloud In a world so beautiful Why ever come down?

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[8] lmp 12-Jun-07/9:32 AM Reply

leaving Athens? :D

i can answer the question: to go to Delphi, navel of the world.

[7] Dovina 13-Jun-07/10:12 AM Reply

The comma after I is distracting. The caps at line starte are inconsistent. Otherwise good.

[n/a] oneglove › Dovina 13-Jun-07/5:24 PM Reply

Oops I meant to caps all of them

[9] Skamper 14-Jun-07/5:47 PM Reply

You know, I'm not great on titles - in fact can be a bit random with them, but when you write with such dream-like and warm images I think your title should reflect that. It seems a little bland for what you have actually written, which is really good. I like it immensely.