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In the circle of agoniesâ¦

Member since 2002 · Posted 20 Jun 2007 · 1 comment

Agony is the term for extreme pain That may or may not last forever, The worst of life of agony, Which I can do best, Agony lies here in the eyes, Staring and raging at the dying light of a day, One more day within slow agony, Above the land of nothingness, Deepening the bleakness of my shadows, Inside the heart of darkness, Where I want to walk into, Is that darkness Iâm waiting for? is there the agony there? Thatâs the worst last here, Am I that agony in the mirror? Thatâs the destiny, In the circle of agoniesâ¦

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[7] Skamper 21-Jun-07/3:54 PM Reply

Get rid of all the punctuation - use the ends of lines as the break points and throw way those capitol letters. Agony is a fairly powerful word, but using it too often in the one write (even though it is about agony) robs it of the impact. This has almost the reclusive feel one who lives in pain constantly.