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Farewell

Member since 2007 · Posted 3 Jul 2007 · 4 comments

What say you - Conscience Yes, itâs the right thing to doâ¦ What say you - Guilt She got whatâs comingâ¦ And you - Imagination Nothing, Iâve nothing to sayâ¦ Excellent - itâs done then Yes

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[4] INTRANSIT 4-Jul-07/7:23 AM Reply

For some reason, I want one more couplet. I'm gonna sit with Mage on this. There's GOBS of potential here. Put it away and look at it again in a week.

[6] Dovina 4-Jul-07/6:10 PM Reply

I think commas would be better than dashes here. âWhat say you â Conscienceâ means that what you say is Conscience. But I think you are asking your Conscience what it says.

[6] lmp 5-Jul-07/8:38 AM Reply

agree with Dovina's coments and also with INTRANSIT. this does have a lot more potential, and you have shown us with previous work that you can polish this up.

[n/a] Skamper 11-Jul-07/2:30 AM Reply

I know - it was all rather haphazzardly written. It is an old one that I stuck up here on my way out. I am travelling Australia for a year and will only post sporadically (got that from clueless)...
thanks for the input anyway! :) cya when I can.