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Free verse № 153606

Passive Birth Control

Member since 2003 · Posted 22 Aug 2007 · 7 comments

I. There comes a time when there are two things left to say: First a sigh brutally communicates “forfeiture is the new assertiveness”. Last, a moan is the sole purveyor “it’s up to the ovum to decide whether to induce escape”. II. Escape is being redounded by a devout with a minor in debauchery who reviles the politics you revere while you debase his devotement despite his warm brown skin, reconciling “come home”.

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[n/a] miraclemaker 23-Aug-07/1:46 AM Reply
Please write a part three.
[n/a] http://mulberryfairy › miraclemaker 24-Aug-07/3:16 PM Reply
How come?
[9] deleted user 23-Aug-07/2:17 PM Reply
"a devout with a minor in debauchery," an absolutely brilliant line.
[n/a] http://mulberryfairy › deleted user 24-Aug-07/3:15 PM Reply
thanks
[8] abecedarian 23-Aug-07/8:39 PM Reply
Good to see you writing again :)
[10] INTRANSIT 24-Aug-07/6:39 AM Reply
I second Paul S.
[9] Dovina 24-Aug-07/3:30 PM Reply
You use some unusual words: devotement (devotion, perhaps); devout as a noun (but it works); redounded (a more common word might do better). Overall, it's a novel thing and therefore good.