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Passive Birth Control (Free verse) by http://mulberryfairy
I. There comes a time when there are two things left to say: First a sigh brutally communicates “forfeiture is the new assertiveness”. Last, a moan is the sole purveyor “it’s up to the ovum to decide whether to induce escape”. II. Escape is being redounded by a devout with a minor in debauchery who reviles the politics you revere while you debase his devotement despite his warm brown skin, reconciling “come home”.


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Arithmetic Mean: 8.0
Weighted score: 5.806824
Overall Rank: 1679
Posted: August 22, 2007 8:03 PM PDT; Last modified: August 22, 2007 8:03 PM PDT
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[n/a] miraclemaker @ 72.130.249.51 | 23-Aug-07/1:46 AM | Reply
Please write a part three.
[n/a] http://mulberryfairy @ 207.5.159.9 > miraclemaker | 24-Aug-07/3:16 PM | Reply
How come?
[9] deleted user @ 63.127.193.79 | 23-Aug-07/2:17 PM | Reply
"a devout with a minor in debauchery," an absolutely brilliant line.
[n/a] http://mulberryfairy @ 207.5.159.9 > deleted user | 24-Aug-07/3:15 PM | Reply
thanks
[8] abecedarian @ 71.231.136.220 | 23-Aug-07/8:39 PM | Reply
Good to see you writing again :)
[10] INTRANSIT @ 65.29.52.204 | 24-Aug-07/6:39 AM | Reply
I second Paul S.
[9] Dovina @ 12.173.121.144 | 24-Aug-07/3:30 PM | Reply
You use some unusual words: devotement (devotion, perhaps); devout as a noun (but it works); redounded (a more common word might do better). Overall, it's a novel thing and therefore good.
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