poemranker ::One Perfect Moment by sonawrote

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Free verse № 154145

One Perfect Moment

Member since 2004 · Posted 18 Oct 2007 · 2 comments

We walked in the forest for peice of mind, some solitude we went far from everyone just woods for miles, not a sound we found our place under sunny skies, amist satin floral beds you could have heard a butterfly flutter, I only hear your breath your eyes look into me,opening the window that bears my soul I open it freely,letting this moment absorb its place in memories could not have been more perfect, more peaceful, more open than this I sigh and rest with you a moment, for you took my breath away a tear rolls down my cheek, and my heart bleeds for the words I cannot say without a sound you tell me, not to think of when you're gone with your eyes I touch these lips, I hold your heart, as you hold mine, I draw it all inside, for one perfect sunny afternoon, I smell the flowers, I see the sun, I breathe the simplicity and ease of being so free I lock it all away inside my soul for when you're gone

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[9] x0lovelylarnx0 19-Oct-07/12:30 PM Reply
Good poem! I know Rockmage gave you a 1, but ignore it because he gives everyone ones or zeros. He also has like another account where he gives his poems 10s! So don't think your poem is bad just because he gave you a 1!
[4] Skamper 22-Oct-07/10:19 PM Reply
if this is a true account of a time in your life - tell of something that has a personal touch, for readers to connect to the melancholy of it all. Otherwise it's just nothing, a blurb on the back of a romance novel...