white whale

Member since 2003 · Posted 15 May 2010 · 3 comments

what's an ahab to do? hot to trot on the beach salt crusting my mouth baked and begging to take a stab at whale tail harpoon in hand, i make a splash diving down to the floor an ocean undulating, feet flailing wildly i breach the surface then gasp for air unable to fight for long, the calf relents writhing in a pool of her own fluids she shudders, closing her eyes sated by the bloodless death

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[8] Dovina 1-Aug-10/5:56 PM Reply

Some people think that Moby Dick is about a man after a whale. Im glad to see that you see more than that in it.

[n/a] http://mulberryfairy 29-Aug-10/9:28 PM Reply

nice sex/hunt Ahab

[6] Edna Sweetlove 24-Sep-10/4:51 AM Reply

Odd. Try getting more comments by submitting it to: http://ednaspoetrysite.proboards.com ? I would if I were you...