poemranker ::"Threenager" by nypoet22

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Free verse № 160688

"Threenager"

Member since 2006 · Posted 24 Mar 2021 · 3 comments

Egg ellipsed popping lips burble for attention grown-up dining cannot give. I can offer no pretense of conquered formulae, knowing a man by his walk, A woman by sweeping hips to beckon, please, carry a boy to his first filled lungs. This confusion unresolved, he screams reflexively at walls he knows he can't climb, refuses to wash his hands, lie down in bed, or wake up too late to say goodbye.

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[7] Dovina 10-Apr-21/10:50 AM Reply
they carry a boy to his first filled lungs--it works well. his confusion unresolved . . . too late to say goodbye--rather glib, I think.
[6] SupremeDreamer › Dovina 25-Apr-21/3:04 AM Reply
Hey, you're still alive!
[6] SupremeDreamer 25-Apr-21/3:03 AM Reply
69 gone wrong?