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Free verse № 16399

O Man Away From Me

Member since 2002 · Posted 20 Sep 2002 · Edited 25 Sep 2002 · 7 comments

How did it start, the Cutting words apart, and Keeping to the pattern? You chose, to sew, Sew your words against the cold Inside. Why hide behind the knowing? Your heart shows through to those with Eyes to see through the embroidery. Finery dressed in Spartan spurts Is plain to me; all I needed was the numbers And I had you figured. You banged your keys in defense of the Spiritually counted babbler, who Someone else owned, and I saw you then Though the veil was dense, Though not so thick as the Wrath you'd vent And you piqued me. Obverse and reverse, Hasn't Caesar had his due? The contract's done; you Were the one. But, so was I Left behind To learn the craft of quilting. Heavy blankets make a warm bed.

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[6] DreamMachine 20-Sep-02/4:46 PM Reply
Time is dealt with on this side of the galaxy but I do recall an interest for some such as yourself that have a nac for weaving thier own webs or should I say blankets of time in your case?
[n/a] deleted user 20-Sep-02/6:30 PM Reply
Point taken. Point taken.
[n/a] Limness › deleted user 20-Sep-02/6:53 PM Reply
ah. babbit had too strong a beat to be beaten. i am glad to see you peek out now and again.
[n/a] god'swife 22-Sep-02/4:57 PM Reply
I love the heavy blankets line, have you thought of leaving it there? the next line subtracts from it.
[n/a] Limness › god'swife 25-Sep-02/10:02 AM Reply
you are correct. it's gone now. the point was taken. actually, the idea for the last bit drew out, in part, from lucinda williams' 'lonely girls' on her essence cd.
[n/a] Tibbs 25-Sep-02/10:50 PM Reply
Indeed. But flesh makes a warmer one, as we both must know.
[9] Shardik 23-Jan-03/5:23 PM Reply
Impressive knitting.