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Taffy

Member since 2002 · Posted 24 Sep 2002 · 20 comments

We would begin with wishes. Bubbling up, as in boiling sugar; The hot, glossy bubbles of an unformed sweet, beautiful, but looking nothing like salt water taffy, Are pulled, broken, stretched and dulled, So dull they become reality And no one is really happy.

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[8] Christof 24-Sep-02/7:48 AM Reply

I like your central image a lot, but I'm afraid I don't know what taffy is - like toffee maybe? Excuse my ignorance, I'm English... I like it though.

[9] <~> 24-Sep-02/7:54 AM Reply

especially when it sticks to one's teeth. ah, the sweetness of sugared wishes. maybe lose the 'in' in line 2? welcome to the site, knickytoy. i know yer going to like it here.

[7] deleted user 24-Sep-02/8:11 AM Reply

"so dull they become reality." yikes. your reality can't be that dull or you couldn't write any poetry, i'm guessing. this depressed me a little, so it must work. nice. keep it up, or Z will start throwing barbs.

[8] Christof 24-Sep-02/8:23 AM Reply

But will someone explain taffy to me?

[7] god'swife 24-Sep-02/8:34 AM Reply

I never did like Taffy, but I ate it. I like this poem.

[8] Christof › god'swife 24-Sep-02/8:36 AM Reply

BUT WHAT IS TAFFY? Please!

[n/a] knickytoy › Christof 24-Sep-02/8:45 AM Reply

Taffy, often called salt water taffy though lord knows why, is a very chewy, soft, pastel hued candy made of sugar. It has a consistancy similar to gum but it dissolves eventually. It can pull the fillings out of your teeth.

[9] <~> 24-Sep-02/8:42 AM Reply

taffy is a candy traditionally made with sugar and salt water. boil it down let it cool, pull and stretch it--wrap it in wax paper, and sell it to tourists. see: http://www.mtnlaurel.com/Recipes/taffy.htm or http://homepages.skylink.net/~skaarup/pages_candy/candy_09_taffy.html

[8] Christof › <~> 24-Sep-02/8:46 AM Reply

Hey thnaks for that. I don't think we have this in Britain at all but it looks delicious - related to toffee, but the salt water component is unique. Yummmmm. Nearly as good as dirty toenails.

[8] INTRANSIT 24-Sep-02/1:00 PM Reply

Nice depth without losing the reader. Personally,leave it alone.8

[7] poetandknowit 24-Sep-02/4:30 PM Reply

Pretty good stuff. Are you really z's friend or are you z. Do you garden at night? Are you prettier than she? I need to know these things before we go on. Anyway, minus the fact I tripped up over the caps on each line except for beautiful, which I thought was unnecessarily blatant, this is a fine piece.

[9] <~> › poetandknowit 24-Sep-02/5:17 PM Reply

knicky-t's one smart cookie. she's a radcliffe girl. i went to art school, 'nuff said. but i still beat her at scrabble last night. (we take turns winning, i guess) listen to me, answering for her. we are both gardeners; we are creatures of rivalling beauty; and, i, at least, could give a crap about caps. it's the alliteration and the assonance that i'm on about, p&k. (sorry if i answered for you, knicky-t)

[7] poetandknowit › <~> 24-Sep-02/8:13 PM Reply

Do you scrabble in the nude?

[n/a] knickytoy › poetandknowit 25-Sep-02/6:42 AM Reply

Heavens no. We cook a decent meal and have desserts from France when we Scrabble. Zin and I used to work together. Those were the days! We would argue over who was more popular with the customers.

[9] <~> › knickytoy 25-Sep-02/6:52 AM Reply

and we put a fairly decent dent in that chardonnay, even without katpez's help.

[10] Lenore 24-Sep-02/8:22 PM Reply

When I feel like that I go to York beach and ride the coaster,build sand castles and gorge myself on the peanut butter taffy made right there on the board walk. I come home feeling all shiny, and new again. Great poem! 10/10

[7] Rex Karrs › Lenore 28-Sep-02/8:59 AM Reply

thanks for awakening my York Beach memories, Lenore.

[5] Tintagiles 25-Sep-02/7:29 PM Reply

Is candy all you ever talk about?

[7] Tibbs 25-Sep-02/11:58 PM Reply

Sticky. Good, because it's not been pulled too far.

[7] Rex Karrs 28-Sep-02/9:00 AM Reply

Sort of a New England "Like Water for Chocolate" - I ate this one up.