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Free verse № 16993

The Sands Of Time

by squall1leonheart

Member since 2002 · Posted 24 Sep 2002 · 6 comments

As I sit here wanting to cry,I find no joy in my life and want to die.I hear something,I look,and Isee what is to happen to me,for i am lost in the sands of time.As i walk through the sands of time,in the hourglass of life,I feel my self start to feel fear grow in my heart,and it seems i can not go on.And as i gather up my strength,and my courege,I start to walk agin,and i see a wonderful sight,all that is holy has come to rescue me,but that sight turns to fear,as I see wickedness aprouch me,reach for my heart,but the it disapers.I am houlisanating in the sands of time,And as i walk,wondering if my life would get any better,i wonder if i can escape this prison of sand,but find no exit.as I sit,rigt here in the middle of this prision,I no there is no escape.As of now,I know I will not escape.I know I will die in the sands of time.

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6 comments

[8] INTRANSIT 24-Sep-02/5:58 PM Reply
Work on your spelling a little. Work downpage a little too, please.
Sands of time is an excellent subject.I hope you're not really that sad at 11 yrs. Welcome to the pool.8
[0] poetandknowit 24-Sep-02/7:01 PM Reply
This is not a poem. It is a line!
[n/a] squall1leonheart › poetandknowit 11-Oct-02/8:44 PM Reply
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[4] Tintagiles 25-Sep-02/7:20 PM Reply
I wouldn't mind the single line so much if you spelt well. Please tell me that 'houlisanating' wasn't just a typo, but supposed to mean something.
[3] rockinindividual 25-Jan-03/1:38 PM Reply
you need to work on your spelling...and maybe reorganize it a little so its easier to read..everything just seems to blur together the way it is now...3
[6] Brittanyy 6-Jul-04/10:53 AM Reply
How are you writing about wanting to die at 11 years old? You haven't experienced enough to know anything about depression. This poem contradicts the other poem you wrote. In your other poem you talk about how you're not one of those depressed people and in this poem you seem suicidal? Whatever kid.