poemranker ::Haiku by heart

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Other № 19359

Haiku

by heart

Member since 2002 · Posted 8 Oct 2002 · Edited 8 Oct 2002 · 6 comments

Pre-defined, imprisoned-rigid cadence, Sparsely worded, sets the stage before the final turning, You will never see iambic haiku.

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6 comments

[6] <~> 9-Oct-02/8:32 AM Reply
would be better if the first line had more 'rigid cadence'.
[n/a] heart › <~> 10-Aug-03/10:46 PM Reply
Yep. Thanks for the feedback.
[6] deleted user 14-Nov-02/2:24 PM Reply
...I don't think this counts as haiku, does it? The lines are too long. But I like how it's self-referential and a bit ironic.
[n/a] heart › deleted user 10-Aug-03/10:45 PM Reply
No, the poem isn't a Haiku (the style is listed as Other). The poem's title is Haiku, but that's a reference to the subject of the poem; I didn't mean it to literally describe the style. If you count syllables, you might notice a relation to Haiku of sorts, but since it's nearly iambic, the syllable counts had to be even numbers.
[6] deleted user › heart 13-Aug-03/8:59 PM Reply
Oh, I see; I thought the title meant it was a haiku, rather than a comment on the haiku style. I like it, then.
[2] ciantu 5-Dec-02/2:34 PM Reply
ok