a genius

Member since 2002 · Posted 15 Oct 2002 · 9 comments

I can see it now at a fragile age your first love second love whatever love that you should want because you will not be denied, have never been denied. I used to rest my head between your shoulderblades and listen to you talking we all knew you were so brilliant. you are more than I will ever have the chance to be but I don't mourn for that anymore. I used to break down at the very mention of your name and shake, and cry it's been three years and still i love you.

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[7] Christof 16-Oct-02/2:29 AM Reply

This is very direct, though I don't really understand the first/second love part - is that you? Or someone else? Anyway, you should forget this person and move on, you'll be happier.

[4] Tintagiles 16-Oct-02/7:03 AM Reply

The ending is so damn boring...

[5] ==Doylum 16-Oct-02/7:11 AM Reply

oh dear

[4] razorgrin 16-Oct-02/7:19 AM Reply

the end makes me think of a cut-out picture shrine with incense and candles.

[1] poetandknowit 16-Oct-02/9:52 AM Reply

I thought this was going to be good but it fell apart line by line until it pooped out in horrific fashion at the end.

[3] god'swife 16-Oct-02/1:16 PM Reply

I can hear the beams failing at L13. Creeeeeeeak, splat!

[8] Nicholas Jones 20-Nov-02/1:43 AM Reply

Are you the child of Mr. Zappa? This is a nicely melancholic, elegiac poem, and it uses the word shoulderblades. Excellent.

[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 29-Nov-02/2:30 AM Reply

i love you too. 10.

[9] debased 30-Nov-02/7:14 PM Reply

sweet