falling

by Aggreddion

Member since 2002 · Posted 19 Oct 2002 · 3 comments

days seem brighter sleep seems deeper sights seems sharper heart beats deeper -falling

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[6] Nicholas Jones 27-Nov-02/5:47 AM Reply

Is this a positive or negative progression? Are these good things, bad things, or a bittersweet mixture of the two?

[7] <~> 27-Nov-02/6:40 AM Reply

i don't think you need 'falling' twice, but i like it at the end. maybe a different title? also, maybe something other than 'deeper' twice? or make it a third, so the repetition is intentional? nice. spare. effective. have a 7 for starters.

[7] horus8 10-Dec-02/11:57 AM Reply

there is no bottom at the top.??