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the queen of carts

Member since 2002 · Posted 4 Nov 2002 · 4 comments

her domain encased in glass and protected from those who might trespass squared bubble numb cold blue white aqua fingers hold the fragile and rejected cigarette butt from the bus rider who has since boarded her lips pursed around carcinogenic warmth held loosely by yellow half-moons overgrown by neglect

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[7] horus8 4-Nov-02/9:43 PM Reply

another splendid thrust...here's a seven.all bad girls deserve a seven unless you're a man..than your an eight for making me need your shaft that much more. 7.

[7] god'swife 4-Nov-02/11:41 PM Reply

Very effective. I completely ignore the first stanza because I have trouble understanding it. You should either through it out or rework it.

[n/a] snacktime › god'swife 5-Nov-02/8:44 AM Reply

it's describing the bus shelter, it's about this homeless lady that lives outside my building. i thought it wasn't too obscured but possibly it is, thanks.

[7] god'swife › snacktime 5-Nov-02/8:48 AM Reply

I think what happened is I was trying to make the discription work for a shopping-cart, do to the title. Perhaps if you changed that, 'queen of the bus stop' not quite but something to that effect, then I'd be more prepared for the 1st image.