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Free verse № 29397

stifled

Member since 2001 · Posted 9 Dec 2002 · 6 comments

i loved you but nobody will ever know i wanted to tell the world but nobody will ever know now you won't hear another word i loved you but now you'll never know i held my breath i held your breath

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6 comments

[2] god'swife 10-Dec-02/12:09 AM Reply
Are you a serial killer? Is this a confession?
[n/a] crin › god'swife 10-Dec-02/10:38 PM Reply
godd's wife, no serial killer here, but mayde i've just been watching too many movies or something. just a clue, "now you won't hear another word" doesn't mean she won't be able to hear me, but just that i won't be telling her i love her anymore.
[n/a] crin › god'swife 10-Dec-02/10:40 PM Reply
god's wife, no serial killer here. maybe i've been watching too many movies. just a clue, i am the one feeling "stifled" here.
[2] god'swife › crin 10-Dec-02/11:05 PM Reply
"i held your breath" sounds like murder, especially when preceded by "nobody will ever know" and "now you won't hear..." Come on 'fess up, you did it.
[n/a] Caducus 10-Dec-02/6:28 AM Reply
This is quite disturbing, and I really dont know how to feel about it, a true mindfucker of a poem, i cant say its bad or good but i wanna know what gods wife whats to know, do you dig bundy?
[n/a] crin › Caducus 10-Dec-02/10:41 PM Reply
i really consider it a compliment that you called this a mindfuck. thank you.:)