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February Loneliness
Having escaped the town my feet pad along
The lonely road. Ice oozes between
The grey cobblestones of cracked macadam
Into a quilt of puddles. Phony warmth
Of February makes me slosh around.
Ebony patches peek through ivory snow
Awaiting the spring planting. A crow screams
Atop a wire, his cries accusing me
Of tramping through the Thumb's
Snow covered woods, barely able to walk
So bundled in layers and heavy boots,
But the canopy of oak and maple
Kept out the heavy snow; so I followed
Not far behind, shuffling my little steps
To your long strides, over stumps and through streams
To a clearing where we crouched behind some brush.
A call brought black flocks circling above us.
The shotgun popped, not an expected blast;
A shadow crumpled, fluttering, falling
To land softly. Like a good retriever
I found the game when the shooting had ceased.
Death rolled back the crow's eyes, four points of red
Stained the blackness shivering with the wind.
We left the bird for the foxes to feast on.
I see this maverick above me now,
The two of us alone. He cries again,
This time pleading with me to stay with him.
A gust whips across snowy fields as I
Quicken my pace to return home to friends.
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This time pleading with me to stay with him.
A gust whips across snowy fields as I
Quicken my pace to return home to friends.
'I see this maverick above me now...
This time pleading with me to stay with him.' = the crow. The third person.
Maybe it's this 'The two of us alone...' that confuses the issue. Where is the father? Dead? Wasn't thinking that when I wrote it.
the 'maverick above' made me think the long strider was a single man, and the boy was tagging along, and could not understand why he would plead for the kid to stay with him. i didn't get at all that the maverick was the crow. and why would he plead for the boy to stay, since the boy had been involved in the shooting of the other crow? not directly, but by his presence, he was complicit in the murder of the crow.
'the two alone' reads to me as just the humans being left.
can this be worked out?
why are they hunting crows anyway?
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