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UltraSound (Free verse) by UnityMitford
Hey kid, Pictures are something else. Spitting image of you. I don't see a pecker. Love dad

Down the ladder: The death of Bachus

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Overall Rank: 1611
Posted: December 18, 2002 7:27 AM PST; Last modified: December 18, 2002 7:27 AM PST
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[10] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 18-Dec-02/7:29 AM | Reply
so, it's a girl then? or is it a ==doylum?
[n/a] UnityMitford @ 167.206.181.179 > <~> | 18-Dec-02/7:30 AM | Reply
with any lucky, she'll be a zzinnia
[10] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > UnityMitford | 18-Dec-02/7:37 AM | Reply
:]
[n/a] ==Doylum @ 62.64.233.210 > UnityMitford | 28-Feb-03/7:59 AM | Reply
you make me ill
[10] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > ==Doylum | 28-Feb-03/11:14 AM | Reply
yah, okay, fine. you make me wet. there.
[n/a] ==Doylum @ 62.64.233.210 > <~> | 28-Feb-03/7:58 AM | Reply
what are you saying? Senesino or one of the brothers Gibbs? NO i say NO. Doylums have lady luncheons. how have you come by such warped informantion? What do they teach these days?
[9] Ranger @ 212.67.100.173 | 18-Dec-02/1:27 PM | Reply
Marvellous
[n/a] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 19-Dec-02/5:02 AM | Reply
Either did I till puberty.

good poeme
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 19-Dec-02/10:15 AM | Reply
unfortunately. miscariage.
[n/a] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.239 > horus8 | 19-Dec-02/10:18 AM | Reply
Please, do us all a favor and shut up.
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 19-Dec-02/11:08 AM | Reply
i wasn't kidding, nor was i trying to be funny. there was a miscarriage, because she was on that shot thing which does something (weaken the lining of the uterus? and the embryo doesn't fasten slides down becomes tubal hemorrages blood, emergency care..vacuuming..half smile guilt no conversation on the way home. SO DON'T FUVCKING TELL ME WHJAT. I MADE A FUCKING COMMENT ABOUT A PIUUECE THAT REMINDED ME OF A SITUATION i went through LASt week called a miscarriage i put it down just because i'm like that. get it it made me think of thast i put it down..i don't need to play fucking mind games with people to get off..get that? i wasn't trying to be fucking funny, so go fuck yourself.
[n/a] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.239 > horus8 | 19-Dec-02/11:21 AM | Reply
No fuck you, pretty boy. If you bothered to make some sense this would never happen. I am just trying to keep the karma balance. And where were you yesterday. I stopped by the address you gave me and no one was home. You pay four car payments to live there, wow. Where was the pool? I told Romer to keep an eye out for you and the boy. You know "No Child Left Behind."
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > poetandknowit | 19-Dec-02/11:46 AM | Reply
easy killer. once again let me 'reiterfy' ha ha (i love mispronouncing shit) holidAYS + nomoney+ miscarriage= heavy on the sauce with a towed vehicle ala-mode..in other words i was in venice beach rrying to figure out where i put my truck, why they moved it (bastards) and where they moved it too. also. i am not pretty, and there is no pool. there's an ocean 15 minutes away.
[n/a] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.239 > horus8 | 19-Dec-02/11:54 AM | Reply
I was in LA yesterday. At the Stillwell. Meetings and money begging.
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > poetandknowit | 19-Dec-02/11:51 AM | Reply
karma balance?..okay mr. zen abacus karma police. did you go to the front door or the back, and name one feature about this place that satood out from the houses around it 'twilight zone theme music' beerneenerner. welcome to the karma zone.
[10] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > horus8 | 19-Dec-02/11:27 AM | Reply
that sucks,h. i did not understand your comment. so sorry for the loss. i know you were so happy about the baby.
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > <~> | 19-Dec-02/11:38 AM | Reply
things happen what can you do? it's fine...she's fine..these things are out of my control, so i just kind of watch it all happen. like when i was a kid and we would go to this chinese restaurant and i would just stare at the fish tank. wondering. wich is wich.
[n/a] UnityMitford @ 167.206.181.179 > horus8 | 19-Dec-02/12:04 PM | Reply
that is a shame, h. sorry. now you and P&K stop fighting and get along like good little boyz.
[n/a] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.239 > UnityMitford | 19-Dec-02/12:12 PM | Reply
Hey, Unity can I read your screenplay?
[n/a] UnityMitford @ 167.206.181.179 > poetandknowit | 19-Dec-02/1:00 PM | Reply
only if i can read yours.
[n/a] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.239 > UnityMitford | 19-Dec-02/1:17 PM | Reply
I do not have a screen play.
[10] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > poetandknowit | 19-Dec-02/1:01 PM | Reply
your email's broken. again.
[10] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 19-Dec-02/1:18 PM | Reply
congradulations! sorry for horus's comment it came out wrong he mumbles out loud..see it's like this sometimes you read something and instantaneously you subconciously mutter things symbols something flashes in your head then its out, and because recently he was involved intimately in some of those symbol flashes he might of thought you wrote the piece towards his situation in a good way, and he was just responding as if he had been asked a question, and then it came out like that.......i know everything will be well with you and yours i give you my blessing and love in a sentence. You are a wonderfull person, healthy and good. You will be a loving and teaching parent, and you are already..you have our best wishes and true love and faith and respect pulling for you and yours this holiday season..yours truly, Bachus, horus and Baba. So mote it be. because it is. have a ten for your picture and your sound.y
[n/a] god'swife @ 209.179.211.248 | 19-Dec-02/1:53 PM | Reply
I don't get it. Great title.
[10] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > god'swife | 19-Dec-02/1:56 PM | Reply
he sent his dad the ultrasounds, and this was his reply.
[8] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 7-Feb-04/5:56 AM | Reply
oddly ... odd.

ahh - its a father talking to his son about a new daughter.
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