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Free verse № 40523

INDECENCY

Member since 2003 · Posted 16 Feb 2003 · 6 comments

I was the store of INDECENCY today The store for FILTH I bought NUTS AND CHOCOLATE MILK I FELT FILTHY I made a pineapple upside down cake In the ablative of our middle age I fed it to my cat WHO FELT INDECENT SO HE THREW IT UP ON MY BEAUTIFUL CARPET A CAUCASIAN BEAUTY FROM THE RUSSIAN STEPPE ALL RUINED I sharpened my pencil today I STUCK IT IN AND MOVED IT ABOUT I am NOT SOME SORT OF FILTHY MAN WHO ALWAYS THINKS ABOUT THE INDECENT AND YET.. AND YET.. I bought the newest Rolling Stones crapfest I listened to the same old songs once and then I FELT LIKE A NEGRO, EMBLACKENED BY MINE OWN CONSCIENCE That LASCIVIOUS TONGUE weighed on my mind Like my "momma's [fat] ass", ALL MY DANCING DID ME NO GOOD I SAT DOWN TO DINNER CURSING AT MY CREATOR FOR CREATING SUCH AN IMPERFECT BEING SUCH AS I URMF MM HOMEMADE MAC AND CHEESE URF DUH

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6 comments

[n/a] Fear of Garbage 16-Feb-03/3:17 PM Reply
this makes me lose lose all power of speech. i don't even know where to start.
[8] Bachus 16-Feb-03/3:55 PM Reply
Is it just me, or are you setting new boundaries for the term 'the one eyed mahout was a lonely wacko?' my favourite part was "[fat]" my choad buzzed than fairy-moaned.
[n/a] TanHand › Bachus 16-Feb-03/4:56 PM Reply
My favourite part is "nuts and chocolate milk"?
[n/a] wOrnella Mutiw 16-Feb-03/6:24 PM Reply
You're a negro. You watch the Parkers.
[n/a] dmzoacan › wOrnella Mutiw 9-Apr-03/11:20 AM Reply
Yesuh ma'am I sures do. Could you please be as kind as to tell me where the Rilke books is? WHORE
[8] god'swife 20-Feb-03/8:15 AM Reply
Ends badly. Like the cake, you have stained a well crafted thing. I love L2,S2, though I'm sure I'm not interpreting it the way you meant. I would end this poem at "ALL MY DANCING..."