April Showers

Member since 2003 · Posted 18 Feb 2003 · 6 comments

Touch the sky and bring it down Caress it as your child Be barren no more! Her eyes, pure blue, towards nature's mound Hanging above the the smile From her face the tears pour! So young and helpless, still fearing the world She lets the traffic pass and waits alone! Her body trembles, an open door? All attend a mass Each in hand, a stone.... Empty space, Her beauty bruised Innocence fade, emotions used

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[n/a] Nicholas Jones 18-Feb-03/7:55 AM Reply

Your a bit too early. Maybe in April I'll empathise. But today is very cold and windy. So cold and windy your head hurts if you forget your hat.

[n/a] mindsigns › Nicholas Jones 18-Feb-03/12:07 PM Reply

Nicholas, if the poem was about the month of april I'd agree, seeing i just finished shoveling 25 inches a nice fresh snow from the drive way, and hey it's still cold and windy in April too- just to remind you

[5] horus8 18-Feb-03/7:33 PM Reply

nice try, but you fail.
miserably may i add.

watch

Look at me a fucking hack
a steaming mound of poo
i can't see or turn back
because i'm sniffing glue
and i know i'm absurd
for dicking with the pope
it's just the way i praise the word
when i can barely cope
with the shit i read all day
how can one survive
i need a whip to properly flay
i hate being alive
Can you fucking blame me?
You were serving cold tea.

[n/a] <~> › horus8 18-Feb-03/7:36 PM Reply

chinese cold tea?

blue laws in california?

wtf

[n/a] mindsigns › horus8 19-Feb-03/5:49 AM Reply

hey horus, there is more than one friggin kind of sonnet out there, they aren't all Shakespearian, though I did like yours. Mine wasn an attempt at creating my own style, you can say it sucks but don't say it failed

[4] x311 21-Feb-03/8:02 AM Reply

Eh, so so. Guess I just couldn't relate to it all that well and didn't really see the vision you were going for.