On The First Night

Member since 2002 · Posted 24 Feb 2003 · 4 comments

Watching your eyes travel beneath thier lids, Wondering what fantasies are in that endless journey, I want to join you in your dream world as you have joined mine The dreams in your head, the visions of your mind, Whatever you can imagine of in your wonderland trips, Would fail to better what I've found I see my hopes, all my dreams, Every falling star wish I ever made, You granted me with your stumble into my life

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5 votes so far. Yours would make 6.5 votes so far

4 comments

[6] hipster flare 24-Feb-03/6:04 AM Reply

Nice, but seems to lack anything concrete or precise.

[n/a] OneFingerAnswer › hipster flare 24-Feb-03/9:39 AM Reply

Although this was a spur of the moment piece and thus I think it fits to be more sentiment than concrete I'd be willing to take suggestions on ways to revise.

[6] CrAzYlAdY Surukain 24-Feb-03/9:12 AM Reply

hmmmmmm well, i say 6

[9] BrandonW 30-Nov-05/10:27 PM Reply

Fuck.. I like it.. its sweet.. and I like it -9