poemranker ::The Red Light Man by scitz

DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Free verse № 41950

The Red Light Man

Member since 2002 · Posted 27 Feb 2003 · Edited 28 Jul 2003 · 5 comments

Big hand on seven, Little hands frozen, Black puddles flow, A vagrant laughs then collapses, Here I stand waiting for her, By her allocated lamp post, Watched by a white man talking like a black man, Flicking old presidents. My hair stands up like a marine, Ashamed of the color temptations become, The traffic lights turn green, Harlots cling on to the stationary buicks, Here in the last saloon of lowlives, I see my face blurred in shimmering puddles, My wife at home cooking me Steak, As I just wait for for my pound of flesh, I feel no remorse, I am a still membrane. Desire is my enemy of conscience.

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 5.60 weighted 5.07 rank 6533 views 174 View voting details →

5 votes so far. Yours would make 6.5 votes so far

5 comments

[9] spank me baby yeah 27-Feb-03/3:01 AM Reply
NAUGHTY NAUGHTY MAN ! BUT I LIKED MANY LINES IN THIS, VERY GOOD 9
[9] Jeremi B. Handrinos 1-Mar-03/11:03 PM Reply
That was swell.
[7] daniella 8-Mar-03/7:24 PM Reply
go home and get your meat. if you dont go home and eat your meat you will end up with no pudding love.
[8] horus8 28-Jul-03/12:03 PM Reply
I would end at enemy.
[8] cacophony 28-Jul-03/1:31 PM Reply
Like it a lot - I agree with Horus8 however "of conscience" seems to muddy the last line. 8