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Free verse № 42375

Homecomings

Member since 2002 · Posted 4 Mar 2003 · 4 comments

I was born in a Northern town. The Mersey flows by a motorway, M60 circular goes down to Liverpool. I was born in England. in a northern town famed for nothing. A place none of my ancestors had heard of. So I have only shallow roots in this heavy clay Cheshire soil. I grew up in a housing estate conceived in the sixties. One house on my street was the original farmhouse surrounded by suburban imitations and neat front gardens. Life points in two directions, north to the city south to the hills. I always hated my corner of suburbia and always plotted to leave. My parents still live in the same house. I have never gone more than six months Without a trip home. Soon I will think about booking a train ticket for Easter in Stockport and personal resurrection.

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[n/a] <~> 4-Mar-03/11:11 AM Reply
nicholas--there's unplanted topsoil here, until the last 4 lines. stop telling me. you've fallen off here. use your eyes to write with, your nose, your fingertips and toes.
[8] Shardik 4-Mar-03/5:52 PM Reply
The top five lines are redundant. The rest a hell of a meal. Simple, and pleasantly sinister.
[n/a] Christof 13-May-03/9:18 AM Reply
The last 4 lines are really good, I agree, the rest just a little bald and declamatory.
[n/a] Nicholas Jones › Christof 14-May-03/7:23 AM Reply
Hello again Mr. Christof. Yes, much of this poem is a bit rubbish. It needs a lot and more work, and should be about a quarter the length. Still, it was worth a try.